In grade school, I remember having
“fun Fridays” at the end of each long, gruesome week of times tables and story
time. While I remember looking forward to them every Thursday night, I can’t
recall what this “fun” might have entailed. Like the ghost of King Hamlet Sr. in
Shakespeare’s Hamlet, “fun Fridays”
has become a presence that looms over me at the end of each week, begging me to
make things right again. And so, as to avoid death and utter tragedy, I have
decided to avenge “fun Fridays” by bringing them back. That’s right, for all of
you reading this, today is FUN FRIDAY. Even saying the words gives me chills.
However, since the age of six, I believe
that my idea of “fun” has changed a tiny bit. So for these next three weeks,
“fun Fridays” consist of me watching as many movies as possible in the fourteen
hours that I have (the other ten are set aside for sleeping). I started off
this fun Friday by watching the movie, My
Week with Marilyn. This story, about a boy who befriends Marilyn Monroe while
working on his first movie set, was so unique that it had my complete attention
from beginning to end. And because its fun Friday, I feel no obligation to
explain why that is in great detail.
Instead, I decided to rewrite one of
the pivotal scenes in the movie. In this scene, Colin Clark, the third
assistant to the Director, overhears Marilyn crying in the hallway after
reading something her husband, Arthur Miller, wrote inside a notebook. There is
little dialogue in the original scene, and mostly consists of long shots of
Marilyn’s tear-streaked face. Since fun Friday has become my new YOLO, a phrase
that precedes dangerous decision-making, I thought I
would attempt to make the scene better.
MY WEEK WITH
MARILYN REVISED SCENE: SCRIPT
INT. PARKSIDE HOUSE. BEDROOM -- NIGHT
COLIN sits on a couch next
to ROGER, who is asleep and snoring. However, COLIN doesn’t seem to notice as
he waves a glass of brandy in the air.
COLIN
(slurring)
My
dad says...my, my dad says no Colin,
there’s no reason Colin...you must try and find a good use of your time. And
here I am, sitting in the room next to Marilyn Monroe.
COLIN raises his glass as
if toasting, and chuckles to himself. He looks at his hand for a second too
long, then hears a THUMP coming from the other side of the wall. He sets his
drink on a coffee table and gets up. ROGER continues snoring.
SMASH CUT TO:
INT. PARKSIDE HOUSE. HALLWAY -- NIGHT
COLIN’S P.O.V.: The
hallway is empty except for an open notebook a few inches from the wall. MARYILYN
enters the hallway and picks up the notebook, flipping through the pages as if
looking for something. She is wearing a sleek, cream robe and no shoes. From
the bags under her eyes, COLIN can tell she’s been crying.
MILLER (Off
screen)
Don’t
be so dramatic. It’s just what I do, I write for a living, in case you’d
forgotten.
It isn’t clear whether
MARILYN hears him or not, and continues flipping through the pages until she’s
found the right one.
MARILYN
Right
here, this is where you say, and the man
knew he could not love her anymore. It’s about me, isn’t it.
MILLER
It’s
just a story, Marilyn, I thought you’d like it.
MARILYN
(mystified)
Like
it? Like it?
MARILYN holds the notebook
up to her face and sobs, getting the pages wet. She then sees COLIN in the
doorway across from her, and they hold eye contact until COLIN breaks it.
MARILYN clears her throat.
MARILYN
(reading)
Oh Jacob, please don’t leave me here! She wailed as
her knees caved in and she fell to the floor. But all he left her with was the
sound of the door slamming and the buzz of the refrigerator.
MARILYN’s arms swung out
wide, in mock despair, but real tears still streamed down her face. Somehow,
COLIN knew that MARILYN was putting on a show for him. He didn’t want to
encourage her, but couldn’t stop watching.
MILLER (Off
Screen)
That’s enough.
MARILYN
(still
reading)
Out in the driveway, Jacob clutched the steering
wheel tight, apprehensive that his wife might run from the house and convince
him to stay with one flick of her curly, blonde hair...
MILLER steps into the
hallway in blue flannel pajamas and a set of matching slippers. He grabs for
the notebook, but MARILYN pulls it just out of his reach. COLIN leans back so
that MILLER can’t see him, but doesn’t leave.
MILLER
I said that’s enough.
MILLER holds his hand out,
palm up, anger seething from his eyes. MARILYN ignores his hand and shoves the
notebook into his chest. MILLER stumbles backwards, but remains upright.
MARILYN
And by the way, apprehensive has two P’s.
MARILYN doesn’t look him
in the eye when she said it, and storms back into the bedroom. MILLER
reluctantly follows her after rubbing at the damp notebook. COLIN backs out of
the doorway slowly and Parkside House is silent once again.
FADE TO
BLACK.
MOVIES WATCHED: 2
SCREENPLAY PAGES WRITTEN: 12
NOVEL PAGES WRITTEN: 48
PAGES LEFT IN HOW TO WRITE A SELLING
SCREENPLAY: 235
PAGES LEFT IN MISS PEREGRINE’S HOME FOR
PECULIAR
CHILDREN: 281
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